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brandondizzle
10-08-2009, 12:18 AM
jatah, ima battle u man, just let me get all the petty shit out my way so i can have some real fun with a real battle...tez, get this nigga man.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PlrWaod-2Q0

i start when the beat drops

first let ask me ask ya'll y this nigga catchin feelin's/
jelous of my visions, of lamborgini chillin/
nigga knows he garbage, thats y he aint respond/
this nigga is a hoe, he needa go to prom/
get his lil dude, hang a flower from his arm/
call his family out and take a picture with his mom/
dont really gotta say much, just a fish in a pond/
if u wanna get ripped here's a ticket, stand in line/
thank u j-loc, u making me hot/
thank u j-loc, for bein forgot/
thank you thank you thank u nigga/
i need to make a mixtape, watch my name get bigga/
what it is, what u gon do/
should've known all the shit that u goin through/
u depressed, man u look like u need a rest/
well here u go POW POW, 2 shots in ya chest, now u layed to rest/


(me cryin***) everybody bow they heads for a moment of slience...j-loc was a sweet dude. he was really caring...really had visions of bein someone. but we all know that he's now in a better place...we will miss u j-loc...we love u...no homo lol...oh yeah, and j-loc...THANK YOU lol...u suck nigga

Propz
10-08-2009, 12:54 AM
Your Welcome

thank u j-loc, u making me hot/

brandondizzle
10-08-2009, 01:03 AM
yup...all thanks to u pimp...i dont wanna go hard...but i'll keep steppin it up until u realize u aint got game

Propz
10-08-2009, 01:08 AM
No Thank you ur my biggest fan

thank you thank you thank u nigga/

liltezr13
10-08-2009, 09:25 AM
Lol,

JaTahChild01
10-08-2009, 05:39 PM
first let ask me ask ya'll y this nigga catchin feelin's/
jelous of my visions, of lamborgini chillin/
^flowed alright but was filler

nigga knows he garbage, thats y he aint respond/
this nigga is a hoe, he needa go to prom/
^again flows but doesnt make any strong impact, hoe and prom has little connection to make this line strong

get his lil dude, hang a flower from his arm/
call his family out and take a picture with his mom/
^doesnt exactly rhyme and your starting to stretch to far on this failed punchline...

dont really gotta say much, just a fish in a pond/
^this coulda been workin in alot better. Since the phrase is generally "big fish in a small pond" or something to that effect. In essence of the phrase you are also a fish in the pond...but i digress...

if u wanna get ripped here's a ticket, stand in line/
^doesnt rhyme with anything in vicinity

thank u j-loc, u making me hot/
thank u j-loc, for bein forgot/
^def filler, this line was useless; Loc got you hot? hold up lol jp

thank you thank you thank u nigga/
i need to make a mixtape, watch my name get bigga/
^fillerrr zzzzz

what it is, what u gon do/
should've known all the shit that u goin through/
^huh? second line is like one giant question mark that goes no where

u depressed, man u look like u need a rest/
well here u go POW POW, 2 shots in ya chest, now u layed to rest/
^u were goin someplace strong with this, then rhymed rest and rest and failed me thinks.


This was considerably weaker than your last drop, I hope u just wrote it up quic kand spur of the moment. bring that A-game for me cuz you are better than this, but props for dropping anything at all. cheers

liltezr13
10-09-2009, 11:24 AM
Nigga yo shit, weak, stop hatin man just do your own shit, fuckin faggot