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Young_Con
01-13-2008, 03:01 PM
Cant see my verse cuz needles dot my I's
My T's Resemble a crusifix wher a white man died
Yall call him jesus
I call it missleadin
Wayne better then Lu? Yall niggaz is sleepin
Check ya pulse see if yall niggaz is breathin
A Girl shake her butt Yall niggaz is feenin
Think you in control, Yall curled aroudn her finga
Call a women a bitch but all ya money go to her
So who da bitch nooww, sir?
My Thoughts over power ya brain, n Blow ya mind
Take over the world one rhyme at a time
Cant catch my trix-- ya silly rabbit
Got sick of holdin bak... So i let him(em) have it
They all ran for cover when i let the beast out the cage
A Lyrical Monsta that cant be tamed, ay

tjjohnson
01-14-2008, 01:37 AM
That's ill.

Young_Con
01-14-2008, 02:28 AM
lol thanks got in a mood with nuthin 2 say....so i just wrote uppin

Young_Con
01-21-2008, 08:12 PM
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Sparx
01-23-2008, 02:12 AM
Cant see my verse cuz needles dot my I's
My T's Resemble a crusifix wher a white man died
Yall call him jesus
I call it missleadin
Wayne better then Lu? Yall niggaz is sleepin
Check ya pulse see if yall niggaz is breathin
A Girl shake her butt Yall niggaz is feenin
sick flow, and Wayne and Lupe dont even belong in the same sentence Waynes shit
Think you in control, Yall curled aroudn her finga
Call a women a bitch but all ya money go to her
So who da bitch nooww, sir?
lol very good, and so true, you can see guys drop mad cash on women especially in *various* clubs
My Thoughts over power ya brain, n Blow ya mind
Take over the world one rhyme at a time
Cant catch my trix-- ya silly rabbit
Got sick of holdin bak... So i let him(em) have it
They all ran for cover when i let the beast out the cage
A Lyrical Monsta that cant be tamed, ay

flow was nice, so was the content but the ending was kinda lazy.... some great metas/punches good, but short verse

Chopz
01-24-2008, 09:49 PM
"Wayne better then Lu? Yall niggaz is sleepin"

Wow... That line blew me away lol... in all honesty this is the only line I was really feeling.. It seems as though you were extremley concentrating on flow throughout the whole thing and it was a bit edgey at times but for the most part nice.. Beginning was a nice way to start a verse, but nice, not great... And the ending doesn't feel like an ending, I feel as if there should've been more there... But anyway nice job keep up the work B.

Peace...

Summer_heat
02-06-2008, 08:40 PM
i dont think i can member much from u before... i think u used to do more story line stuff dint u? that was cool, but its nice to step out n take a shot at other stuff too, this to me seems purely keystyle material. in that case, flow was on point n thats all thats really necessary (aswell as the obvious need to make sense). was good, hope to read more from u. keep it up!