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Montana
06-30-2007, 02:21 PM
Artist: Montana Ft. Lil Sam
Album: Joker EP
Instrumental: Tha Realest,Swoop G, Twist And Lil C Style - Fuck Dre







[Chopped And Screwed]
All This Gun Talk and Claiming Ya'll Doper
U Got Me Laughing So Much I Turned Into A Joker


[Montana]
Now I know, Y'all didn't think, I could'nt come with hard Shit
Here it is, My last laugh, Y'all Funny to me, I started It (HAHA!)
Knowledged up, I Done and mastered, My own Flow
Got tracks for days, Done and chaperted, My own Flow
Mentaly stored, Let me scalp y'all, To patiently Sore
Above levels, Y'all will never reached, Y'all to Bored
To even catch my attention, Imma continue to Ignore
Every one of y'all, Stated that Imma kick the door Down
To show y'all those lyrical graveyards, What y'all think Now
Shut the fuck up, Quit acting hard, And just Enjoy the Sound
ready to lyrically cremate y'all, To throw your Fuckin ashes Out
Montana Just gettin started, But look I already got Classics Out
Y'all, Ain't got enough To break, What it is you just Heard
Who never thought to Give me another chance, Fuck you are My last words (HAHA!)

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)

[Montana]
I hate to take shit, This far theres really, No Need
Ready to destroy, Everybody you kick it With, Y'all Bleed
Buy A Gun Like Fluxx the OG, Naw y'all ain't worth Bullets (Ha)
Due to y'all hiding, Each of y'all a pussy to the Fullest
Gettin sweaty, So y'all wet, Manchester UK, I Fuckin Represent It
Do a few tracks, Act like a big shot, You a sensitive, Bitch
I Got Murkage Under Ma Belt, Bitches Low voltage No Sparx Are Being Felt
Gonna make it myself Like Scarface, Fuck askin for pointless Help
Im the greatest silence rapper, That could ever be Alive
Stay Quiet But In A Few Bars, I'll destroy and emcee, What a Surprise
Got enough to lyrically kill y'all, And let y'all Die There
This is just a warning, Who gave the Fuckin Empression, That I Care
I used to do this, To try and better myslef, And Who I care For
Now Im ready to destroy Home Fire Emcees, Thats what their there For

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)

Sparx
06-30-2007, 02:25 PM
lmao.... that was a diss? u had time to write this shit but u dont have time for me to destroy u in our battle? sum1's scared.... step ya game up pussy...

Montana
06-30-2007, 02:40 PM
People Generally Don't Go 2 School On Weekends If U Where Online Yesterday Night I Would Of Battled U I Will 2morrow If You Can. Stop Talking Shit. This Is Not A Straight Up Diss Either.

Michael
06-30-2007, 03:07 PM
Artist: Montana Ft. Lil Sam
Album: Joker EP
Instrumental: Tha Realest,Swoop G, Twist And Lil C Style - Fuck Dre







[Chopped And Screwed]
All This Gun Talk and Claiming Ya'll Doper
U Got Me Laughing So Much I Turned Into A Joker


[Montana]
Now I know, Y'all didn't think, I could'nt come with hard Shit
Here it is, My last laugh, Y'all Funny to me, I started It (HAHA!)
Knowledged up, I Done and mastered, My own Flow
Got tracks for days, Done and chaperted, My own Flow
Mentaly stored, Let me scalp y'all, To patiently Sore
Above levels, Y'all will never reached, Y'all to Bored
To even catch my attention, Imma continue to Ignore
Every one of y'all, Stated that Imma kick the door Down
To show y'all those lyrical graveyards, What y'all think Now
Shut the fuck up, Quit acting hard, And just Enjoy the Sound
ready to lyrically cremate y'all, To throw your Fuckin ashes Out
Montana Just gettin started, But look I already got Classics Out
Y'all, Ain't got enough To break, What it is you just Heard
Who never thought to Give me another chance, Fuck you are My last words (HAHA!)

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)

[Montana]
I hate to take shit, This far theres really, No Need
Ready to destroy, Everybody you kick it With, Y'all Bleed
Buy A Gun Like Fluxx the OG, Naw y'all ain't worth Bullets (Ha)
Due to y'all hiding, Each of y'all a pussy to the Fullest
Gettin sweaty, So y'all wet, Manchester UK, I Fuckin Represent It
Do a few tracks, Act like a big shot, You a sensitive, Bitch
I Got Murkage Under Ma Belt, Bitches Low voltage No Sparx Are Being Felt
Gonna make it myself Like Scarface, Fuck askin for pointless Help
Im the greatest silence rapper, That could ever be Alive
Stay Quiet But In A Few Bars, I'll destroy and emcee, What a Surprise
Got enough to lyrically kill y'all, And let y'all Die There
This is just a warning, Who gave the Fuckin Empression, That I Care
I used to do this, To try and better myslef, And Who I care For
Now Im ready to destroy Home Fire Emcees, Thats what their there For

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)
NICE DROP MAN, I WAS FEELING IT. AND SAM'S HOOK WAS NICE TOO. JUST PUT MORE MULTIES IN IT NEXT TIME AND IT WILL BE MORE SPECTECULAR.

Chopz
06-30-2007, 03:33 PM
Ok ok I'll give this a bit of a break down lol...


Hook/Sam

The thing I don'tlike about the hook is that you didn't really think it through... I mean it has a good idea to it but, the fact of the matteris a Joker is a card in a game which is irrelivant... So if we associate that to the rap game you can see what my problem with this is...


Montana 1

The thing which I have to compliment about your verse the most is the flow... I feel as if it had a steady flow all the way through with a healthy syllable count... apart for the last line but I imagined you would spit it in a different light as it is the last line... None-the-less, to me that was the only part which really threw off the flow... Cockyness was a very big part of this verse and to me it threw the quality of it off.... I feel as if the similies and punches which you used were less cocky, and for example such things as laughing after certain punches weren't there... I would be able to see this verse in a much better light... the punches were nice at some parts... But were weak in others...

This verse to me had a nice flow but was iffy with the punches, similies, and execution.. A good verse but definately not one of your best.


Montana 2

Again, a very nice flow and this didn't really have any stand out bars which threw off the flow... although some of the bars werelonger it seems as if the words made the line the same length as one which appears smaller... This verse had the same problem as the last with the similies / Punches... Inconsistancy...


Overall

An OK track... The hook imo was not that great... The verses had a good flow but the punches were inconsistent and the execution was not the best... I feel as if this was not one of your better drops... However, you are making songs and dropping them and for that you do get my respect... Keep up the good work and work on making your punches consistent and to a higher level of quality...

Chopz. Nuff Said.

MAW
06-30-2007, 03:36 PM
Artist: Montana Ft. Lil Sam
Album: Joker EP
Instrumental: Tha Realest,Swoop G, Twist And Lil C Style - Fuck Dre







[Chopped And Screwed]
All This Gun Talk and Claiming Ya'll Doper
U Got Me Laughing So Much I Turned Into A Joker
:laugh:

[Montana]
Now I know, Y'all didn't think, I could'nt come with hard Shit
Here it is, My last laugh, Y'all Funny to me, I started It (HAHA!)
aight opener
Knowledged up, I Done and mastered, My own Flow
Got tracks for days, Done and chaperted, My own Flow
The flow in this lines is a lil bit off
Mentaly stored, Let me scalp y'all, To patiently Sore
Yeh that's a sick line if I understood that wit "scalp ya" right
Above levels, Y'all will never reached, Y'all to Bored
To even catch my attention, Imma continue to Ignore
Every one of y'all, Stated that Imma kick the door Down
To show y'all those lyrical graveyards, What y'all think Now
second bar is sick too cuz i read between the lines :D
Shut the fuck up, Quit acting hard, And just Enjoy the Sound
In my oppinion the link between the lines is a lil bit lost
ready to lyrically cremate y'all, To throw your Fuckin ashes Out
nice shit right here
Montana Just gettin started, But look I already got Classics Out
cool line :)
Y'all, Ain't got enough To break, What it is you just Heard
Who never thought to Give me another chance, Fuck you are My last words (HAHA!)
pretty good closer fo the 1st verse in my oppinion

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)
random hook...rugh line wit the tumour

[Montana]
I hate to take shit, This far theres really, No Need
Ready to destroy, Everybody you kick it With, Y'all Bleed
again aight opener..but nothin special tho
Buy A Gun Like Fluxx the OG, Naw y'all ain't worth Bullets (Ha)
Due to y'all hiding, Each of y'all a pussy to the Fullest
That's a fuckin sick bar...i mean really sick...i used my imagination and it gave me the sickest stuff i've ever seen..great work
Gettin sweaty, So y'all wet, Manchester UK, I Fuckin Represent It
In my vision the first part of this line is related to the bar above...if this is the case it's fuckin hot
Do a few tracks, Act like a big shot, You a sensitive, Bitch
hahahaha
I Got Murkage Under Ma Belt, Bitches Low voltage No Sparx Are Being Felt
nice comparison
Gonna make it myself Like Scarface, Fuck askin for pointless Help
I see u like Scarface :D
Im the greatest silence rapper, That could ever be Alive
nice line...if i read tight between the lines
Stay Quiet But In A Few Bars, I'll destroy and emcee, What a Surprise
i dont really like the ending of the line...or maybe i jus dont get it
Got enough to lyrically kill y'all, And let y'all Die There
This is just a warning, Who gave the Fuckin Empression, That I Care
Damn if i got this here right it's a great line
I used to do this, To try and better myslef, And Who I care For
Now Im ready to destroy Home Fire Emcees, Thats what their there For
Dont really get the last line

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)

Yeh fukin nice joint...u used some cool wordplays but not that much (or maybe i didnt understand every of them)...the hook was aight by Sam..but nothin really special...in most parts of this drop the flow is a little bit off...u definitly have to improve your flow...but all in all it was a nice drop...with at least one sick wordplay.....Keep it up Montana!

lilsam
06-30-2007, 03:57 PM
The Flows Sick, Constant And Never Really Off, Coulda Invision It Audio Wise. Some Nice Lines Here, Ive Seen U Drop Better But ThiS Is Nice, Some Decent Wordplay. Lol Manchester u live In Wigan AKA Pieland Lol J/k Oj Mate, Mnchester Is Where We Born ST MARYS STAND UP! The Concepts ALlright And Is Kinda Like A Keystyle, I SAY 8.5/10

Summer_heat
06-30-2007, 07:46 PM
are u guys like brothers r sumet?
u were both born in Mans, and now u both live in Wigan? confusin lol
on the drop, call me weird, ok i am, but i loved the Hook! it was my fave part of the drop! seriously it was a nice hook imo!
i cud here it, u aint jetted that of channel u or owt have ya? lol jokin. no seriously? na jokin. jus answer it lol
Montana, where to begin? well i wasnt really watchin the flow, i thot u worked that well, however(!) i wasnt so sure on i dunno, erm... the whatchacallit... like the style or tecnique u wrote it in, i dont think its ur usual (aint read ur shit ina while, so dunno, maybe it is, i jus think it doesnt allow u to go into the line deep enuff to get anywhere. i may not b makin sense, if thats the case, awell lol jus ignore me, but if u get me, either use it n think about it or fuck it, either way its upto u. some good lines in there, altho like i said, i dont think the sturucture n style of writin really lets u get many good lines in. nice concept, and a try at sumet diff.

MAW
06-30-2007, 07:48 PM
Naw Montana lives in Wigan and Lilsam lives near Manchester or somethin like that.

lilsam
06-30-2007, 07:56 PM
Montana WIGAN
Lilsam BLACKBURN

we both similar differences from Manchester
but we born there BRAP

FranchizeTheKid
06-30-2007, 08:02 PM
Montana WIGAN
Lilsam BLACKBURN

we both similar differences from Manchester
but we born there BRAP

Does Nickolai Live There As Well?

lilsam
06-30-2007, 08:05 PM
Lol No Hes From The Midlands

DJ-NICKEL
06-30-2007, 08:41 PM
Motana and Lil sam- You both did a real good part on all the verse, i like this one here. Wish i could hear lil sam rap though instead of the hook cause he got some real good line too on his other rap.

Hostile
06-30-2007, 09:38 PM
Artist: Montana Ft. Lil Sam
Album: Joker EP
Instrumental: Tha Realest,Swoop G, Twist And Lil C Style - Fuck Dre







[Chopped And Screwed]
All This Gun Talk and Claiming Ya'll Doper
U Got Me Laughing So Much I Turned Into A Joker
...? Since It's chopped and screwed I'd have to hear it. BUT...It's not a very good second line.


[Montana]
Now I know, Y'all didn't think, I could'nt come with hard Shit
Here it is, My last laugh, Y'all Funny to me, I started It (HAHA!)
Knowledged up, I Done and mastered, My own Flow
Got tracks for days, Done and chaperted, My own Flow
Mentaly stored, Let me scalp y'all, To patiently Sore
Above levels, Y'all will never reached, Y'all to Bored
I think i get the wordplay, but I'll need you to explain it.
To even catch my attention, Imma continue to Ignore
Every one of y'all, Stated that Imma kick the door Down
To show y'all those lyrical graveyards, What y'all think Now
Shut the fuck up, Quit acting hard, And just Enjoy the Sound
ready to lyrically cremate y'all, To throw your Fuckin ashes Out
Montana Just gettin started, But look I already got Classics Out
Y'all, Ain't got enough To break, What it is you just Heard
Who never thought to Give me another chance, Fuck you are My last words (HAHA!)

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour
Not very good. Too simple.

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)
Better. Much better.

[Montana]
I hate to take shit, This far theres really, No Need
Ready to destroy, Everybody you kick it With, Y'all Bleed
Buy A Gun Like Fluxx the OG, Naw y'all ain't worth Bullets (Ha)
Due to y'all hiding, Each of y'all a pussy to the Fullest
Gettin sweaty, So y'all wet, Manchester UK, I Fuckin Represent It
Do a few tracks, Act like a big shot, You a sensitive, Bitch
I Got Murkage Under Ma Belt, Bitches Low voltage No Sparx Are Being Felt
Gonna make it myself Like Scarface, Fuck askin for pointless Help
LOL 'low voltage!'
Im the greatest silence rapper, That could ever be Alive
Stay Quiet But In A Few Bars, I'll destroy and emcee, What a Surprise
Got enough to lyrically kill y'all, And let y'all Die There
This is just a warning, Who gave the Fuckin Empression, That I Care
I used to do this, To try and better myslef, And Who I care For
Now Im ready to destroy Home Fire Emcees, Thats what their there For

[Lil Sam] Hook

The Last Laugh
End It With Humour
Ya Head Ripped Apart
Like Operating On A Tumour

This Aint Stand Up Comedy
Cos U Be Fallin As U Go Broke
Like Fuckin Monopoly
Ya'll Paying Up No Joke (X2)

I tried to do a FULL breakdown, but there wasn't any real good, complex, or notable wordplay, punches or lines in general other than what I mentioned. It was a simple track...Very simple. It flowed, and I think it would sound better than it looks with some touching up.

Montana
06-30-2007, 09:43 PM
The Chopped And Screwed Line Wuznt Like Part Of It Lol. Alot Of Wordplay Wuz Hidden And Complicated Der Wuz Some Wordplay There But I Did This Sorta Like A Keystyle. Thanks For The Feed

$tate
07-01-2007, 04:04 AM
Aight, good joint, like Montana's presence on the joint, hook good.

8.5/10

Montana
07-01-2007, 07:37 AM
Thanks State Anymore feed?

Nickolai
07-01-2007, 11:44 AM
Frannie, On The Real That Fail Attempt Of ''Sonnin'' Me Really Sucked

FranchizeTheKid
07-01-2007, 12:25 PM
Who Said I Was Sonning? Maybe I Was Just MaKKKing A JoKKKe

Watch Nickel Come In Here Thinking I'm Being A Racist And Go "wat u being bei racist fo, that"s nut col that bein trash"

Nickolai
07-01-2007, 12:32 PM
Okkk Makkke Your Jokkkes, Just Makkke Sure Yu Dont Affend Anyone Likkke I Did

LOC
07-01-2007, 07:12 PM
well strucutred but the whole track jus seemed sloppy to me