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DJ-NICKEL
06-23-2007, 09:42 PM
I rock the mic like a rock star, You suck at it more than cock sucker porn star,
Leave you like paul wall when you show you"r fake teeth, i make rap and i make beat
Get you feeling like a pussy when I"m looking for sweet beef, Like when you"r girl tease me
Trust me suckar that when pimping is easy, Not when you cypher fucking over the pc
Like these other bitches talking to much as they speak, next thing is that they have you"r baby.
But yo if that kid don"t look like me, then that the time i leave like a leave in a tree
When the air blow i be like the wind with the smoke of weed, Marijuana and coke and other strange thing.
I can"T stop rapping over the minute, I"M addicted so i can"t quit it, And then i mix it.
Remix is when you sucka re think, Then i cook the beat like a beast with alcohol to drink

FranchizeTheKid
06-24-2007, 02:07 AM
This Was... Wack, But You Can Up Ya Game By Dropping So Keep At It

Montana
06-24-2007, 10:30 AM
Leave Ya Like Paul Wall When Ya Show Ya Fake Teeth Lol. So Yu Gon Buy People expensive Grillz??? :S

Beast with Alcohol 2 drink :S

Sorry Man U Need 2 Work At Ya Freestyles Alot
Try Using Shorter Lines And More Rhyming

Hostile
06-24-2007, 05:49 PM
I ain't even gonna talk down to you man even tho it is just constructive criticism. I'd try to focus on flowing more if I was you than playing with the words and making punchlines. Punches are all good, but they aren't everything.