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MAW
02-27-2007, 01:32 PM
Artist: MAW
Title: Click, Click (Intro)
Album: My Enemy's Stunt EP
Track Number: 01

Beat: Yukmouth's "Get Rich or Die Snitchin'"

[Intro]
Haha, 'sup? Tell me, you know this feeling you ain't got anymore rhymes in your
mind, you shot all bullets? I don't!

[Verse 1]
You think you got a full loaded, glistenin Fo-Fo
aiming at me, squeeze the trigger but nothin blows
Click, Click! You stripped the chamber long time ago
You didn't done loadin it up till now, ma bro
Remember this cold winter in december 2004
You try to shoot me with your nine 9 times in a row!
(Chorus: In vain Motherfuckers, in vain you hoe!)
But I put slugs in the clip till now, you nothin
here you got some lines as a little somethin

[Hook]
Click Click, sound of an empty mag
Click Click, no bullets in the bag
Click Click, you haters got rhyme lack
noise of an empty chamber, Click Clack

[Verse 2]
You always use the same recipe to create your lines
Change it! For example put some more flour in your rhymes
You just throw too less yeast in it, it has to grow up
But be warned and pay attention, coz too much 'n it'll blow up
Try to stir it slowly, so the structure will be the best
Don't mix your special cake too strong, or it'll be a mess
Haha ya think the whole work is done now. Am I right?
Finally put it in the oven. 200 degrees, the result'll be tight!

[Hook]
Click Click, sound of an empty mag
Click Click, no bullets in the bag
Click Click, you haters got rhyme lack
noise of an empty chamber, Click Clack

Nickolai
02-27-2007, 01:35 PM
G2G Now But Will Give Feed

MAW
02-27-2007, 05:52 PM
feeeeeeeed pleaze!

Flash
02-28-2007, 11:04 AM
this is a good intro!Gess the Ep would be nice!i like it!looking for the rest!Keep it up!you improved a lot!

Nickolai
02-28-2007, 11:57 AM
Artist: MAW
Title: Click, Click (Intro)
Album: My Enemy's Stunt EP
Track Number: 01

Beat: Yukmouth's "Get Rich or Die Snitchin'"

GOOD SO FAR, LIKED THIS BEAT

[Intro]
Haha, 'sup? Tell me, you know this feeling you ain't got anymore rhymes in your
mind, you shot all bullets? I don't!

[Verse 1]
You think you got a full loaded, glistenin Fo-Fo
aiming at me, squeeze the trigger but nothin blows

NOT BAD, FLOWS NICE

Click, Click! You stripped the chamber long time ago
You didn't done loadin it up till now, ma bro
Remember this cold winter in december 2004
You try to shoot me with your nine 9 times in a row!

WHO U TALKING TO AND ABOUT? ABIT CONFUSING, FLOWS ONE OF YA STRONG POINTS, BUT IN THESE BARS THERES NUTTIN THAT REALLY MAKES ME GO WOW OR MAKES ME THINK, JUS RHYMING LINES TO ME, SHUD USE MORE SIMILIES, METAZ AND WORDPLAY TO MAKE PEOPLE THINK

(Chorus: In vain Motherfuckers, in vain you hoe!)
But I put slugs in the clip till now, you nothin
here you got some lines as a little somethin

PRETTY WACK, SORRY,

[Hook]
Click Click, sound of an empty mag
Click Click, no bullets in the bag
Click Click, you haters got rhyme lack
noise of an empty chamber, Click Clack

NOT BAD, NICE FLOW AND CAN PICTURE IT IN AUDIO

[Verse 2]
You always use the same recipe to create your lines
Change it! For example put some more flour in your rhymes

CAN SEE WHERE UR TRYNNA GO WIT THIS, MAYBE IF IT WAS WORDED BETTER THIS BAR CUDDA BEEN REAL DOPE. FOR INSTANCE, IN STEAD OF ADDING 'FLOUR' TO THIS GUYS RHYMES, CUDDA SED SUMMIT LIKE COKE OR SUMMIT, SUMFING THAT CAN SURPRISE PEOPLE, BUT I LIKE WOT U WERE TRYNNA DO

You just throw too less yeast in it, it has to grow up
But be warned and pay attention, coz too much 'n it'll blow up

LIKING THE METAPHORS, 2ND LINE DONT THINK IT REALLY CONNECTS WIT THE 1ST

Try to stir it slowly, so the structure will be the best
Don't mix your special cake too strong, or it'll be a mess

UVE GOT SUMFING GOOD GOING ON BUT UR WORDING AND WOT U ACTUALLY SPIT IS RUINING, UVE GOT THE IDEA BUT ONCE AGEN THE 2ND LINE THROWS IT OFF, FLOWS NICE THO

Haha ya think the whole work is done now. Am I right?
Finally put it in the oven. 200 degrees, the result'll be tight!

NOT BAD BAR, INSTEAD OF 'TIGHT' CUDDA SED 'HOT' OR SUMFING THAT CONNECTS WIT AN OVEN OR THE ACTUAL TEMPERATURE TO MAKE IT MAKE MORE SENSE AND TIGHTER

[Hook]
Click Click, sound of an empty mag
Click Click, no bullets in the bag
Click Click, you haters got rhyme lack
noise of an empty chamber, Click Clack

WELL NOT THE BEST DROP FROM U BUT THE CREATIBITY WAS BETTER THAN USUAL
2ND VERSE THE BEST, LIKED WOT U WERE TRYNNA DO
WORDING IS SUMMIT U NEEDTA WORK ON AND IF YA DO ULL SEE A BIG IMPROVEMENT IN YA RHYMES
THIS SONGS TOPIC NOT REALLY MY STYLE BUT ITS SA'LL GOOD
HOPE U COME WIT SUM HEAT IN UR NEXT FEW DROPS
I'LL GIVE DIS A 7/10

MAW
02-28-2007, 12:43 PM
Thanks. I know it wasnt my best track, but it's just the intro.

100% Young Mic
03-01-2007, 01:28 PM
Well, it was okay. It wouldn't take too much to make it a lil' better but it's okay. And I know it was an intro but I think since there was a hook, you had to make it longer... :P

Hostile
03-02-2007, 07:45 PM
If you want a collabo..."Holla My Name" looks mighty inviting

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