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01-05-2007, 08:33 PM
(Something I wrote along time ago)

Tonight’s the Night. Ill let the knife do all the talking,
Talented of carved drawings, the proof lies behind the markings,
Place perfect lines to create the linings, This is the escape of my hidings,
Drift away to a different lighting, A different time and a different blinding,
This time was different…
The blood began to rush out like a faucet,
Held my arm but the flow was to drastic,
Fell to the floor my breath grew reckless,
Uneasy, unbarring, I Just want to bleed until I’m dieing,
This is for every tear, every night I couldn’t stop crying,
I close my eyes.. beneath this spirit. Beneath this life,,
I chose to give up.. to rise up.. to white wanders..

01-06-2007, 12:23 PM
i really liked that
it was short but had an amazin effect in jus few lines
keep it up gurl

Ttown MC
01-09-2007, 07:09 PM
you got a deep impact with ya writeing girl
keep the poems coming

01-09-2007, 08:21 PM
keep it up girl!def talent keep improving!

01-19-2007, 06:26 AM
damn grl dat shyt iz real iight thurr, im feelin how it has a lot of pain in it, keep it straight grrl ya got talent

01-19-2007, 12:16 PM
dameee dat poem was so tru grl I feel ya pain keep it comin ! peace..