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clapbackstunna
12-31-2006, 02:21 AM
I just died in your arms tonight,
Believed the unknown. Felt the unseen,
Now im unbridging the gap in-between you and me,
Dreams of perfection and a word of forever,
The lies hidden beneath breath our vocals would not uncover,
So we speak through tears in the night,
Scared upon the demons that lock your soul in a vigorous fight,
Craft me, you couldn't change me, just speak of me, and tell me,
You swore upon me that you loved me,
Now I wander through the memory lane,
Just more words spoken that force ashes to rain,
And the fire burns as I blow out my flame,
Never again hope rides over me, and forces this feeling
That dies in me; I live in wander, will I ever again,
Flash a flame that ignites me and forces me to try again.

Ttown MC
12-31-2006, 02:46 AM
dope shit bro, this alexe by chance mabye not jsut similar styles i htink

good drop fav lines fo sho these


Now im unbridging the gap in-between you and me,
Dreams of perfection and a word of forever,
The lies hidden beneath breath our vocals would not uncover,
So we speak through tears in the night,
Scared upon the demons that lock your soul in a vigorous fight,

clapbackstunna
12-31-2006, 02:59 AM
lol no... im a girl.. names erica.. havent been on here in a LONG time

Flash
12-31-2006, 10:27 AM
good drop emotions and stuff i realy felt it keep it up!

Chopz
01-02-2007, 02:27 PM
I like this poem because to me it is ambiguous and can be read in two contexts... The vocabulary used was not too much and as it was not a poem full of vocab I got the message of the poem clearly. It is good to see people are still posting in the poetry section, this was a good read and oyu have a lot of talent, keep up the good work.

Summer_heat
01-03-2007, 12:09 PM
this was really nice!
diff style to ALEXE imo, he uses more indepth messages n vocab n all that clever stuff lol,
but i dunno maybe cos i can feel what u sayin, it may b a girl thing, but this poem is "on point" is all i can say, i can relate to this poem, its real, i wudda picked a fave line, but it was very consistent

good job well done, hope to read more poetry from u!

BlackStar
01-03-2007, 01:16 PM
yea, I have to agree with the other guys here, it's a very nice poem!

like Chopz said, the using of the vocabulary is very good and I like the metaphors in it.

Dermo_theMerciless
01-05-2007, 06:45 PM
That was shit