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POC Was Here
12-16-2006, 02:32 PM
[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love
Runaway love


Now Little Stacy Is Only 13 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Wonders Why Her Family's So Hated By The Hood ..
And Just Found Out Her "Daddy" Ain't Related By Blood ..
Her Birth Father Was A Snitch, A Family With A Bad Name ..
The House Gets Shot Up, On The Porch Stacy Cuts A Sad Frame ..
Her Momma Can't Cope, The Heroin Destroyed All Her Hope ..
Her Brother's Only 10, He's In The Trap Slinging Dope ..
Feeling Lonely, She's Hopeless Just Looking For Love ..
He's Near 17, She Thinks It's Cool To Fuck With A Thug ..
Starts To Hang Around Gangs, Won't Accept She's Risking Her Life ..
Thinks She's Loved, Like She's Found What's Missing In Her Life ..
Finds Out Her Brother's In Debt, Grown Men Run Up In Her House ..
Her Brother Is Dead, She Knows This Ain't What Life's About ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
She Says She's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love [x8]


Little Derek Is Only 11 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Bang Red Or Blue Now It's Time To Make His Choice ..
Doesn't Wanna Do It But He's Scared To Raise His Voice ..
Pops Walked Out When He Was 5 And His Momma Still Grieving ..
So Now He's Gotta Bang And Start To Sell Dope Just To Feed Them ..
Posted Up On The Block When He Shoulda Been At School ..
Yeah It's A Cruel World But There's Nothing He Can Do ..
A Victim Of Circumstance, Wishes He'd Been Given A Chance ..
Wants To Stop What He's Doing But He Knows That He Can't ..
There's Only 1 Dude He Trusts, And That's Himself ..
He Feels So Lonely, Nobody He Can Talk To For Help ..
Comes Home 1 Night, Finds Momma In Tears Yet Again ..
Can't Take It Anymore, He Made His Choice There And Then ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
He Says He's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love [x8]

Little Sarah Is Only 8 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Wakes Up In The Morning Just To See Her Momma Crying ..
There's Nothing She Can Do To Help Her But She's Trying ..
No Food In The House So She Goes To School Hungry ..
Tears On Her Face Wondering "Does Anybody Love Me?" ..
Goes Home To Listen To Death Threats From A Neighbour ..
Moms Losing Her Mind, She Prays To God To Try Save Her ..
Pops Is Working Long Shifts To Support A Family Of 6 ..
A Drink Problem, So He Comes Home To Drink Till He's Sick ..
Sarah's Always In Trouble, All She Wants Is A Cuddle ..
In Her Own World, One You Can't See With The Hubble ..
Sees Daddy Hit Mom She Thinks "The Bastard Should Be In Prison" ..
Wonders Why God Never Listened, Then She Made Her Decision ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
She Says She's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love [x8]

POC Was Here
12-16-2006, 02:34 PM
I Wrote This On Sunday, I Was Vibing To The Original Version And Decided To Remix It. As You'll See If You Know The Song, The Start And Ending Of Each Verse Was Kept The Same As The Original Because In My Opinion It'd Fuck Up The Whole Thing If It Was Changed. I'm Only Dropping It Now Cause My Internet Has Been Messed Up.

Oh, And Fluxx I'll Do That Bar For Bar Feed Later On, Just In Case You Thought I Forgot Lol.

Chopz
12-16-2006, 02:53 PM
Verse 1... I feel that this had a lot of good imagery, the words you used to get your point across in my opinion were best shown in this verse... Favourite part;


Her Momma Can't Cope, The Heroin Destroyed All Her Hope ..
Her Brother's Only 10, He's In The Trap Slinging Dope ..


Verse 2... I think that this had the best story line to it out of the three verses... My favourite part;


Pops Walked Out When He Was 5 And His Momma Still Grieving ..
So Now He's Gotta Bang And Start To Sell Dope Just To Feed Them ..

Verse 3.. I feel that this had the bestflow out of the three and this was helped by the structure.. Favourite part ;


Pops Walked Out When He Was 5 And His Momma Still Grieving ..
So Now He's Gotta Bang And Start To Sell Dope Just To Feed Them ..
(First line is heartfelt :( )

all together this was a very strong drop.. I would have liked to see longer verese but I know you were trying to stick to the original.. I feel that this had a perfect flow to go with the original.. You came back strong POC.. 9.2/10...

POC Was Here
12-16-2006, 03:53 PM
Thanks Choppo

Upppppiiiiiin

BlackStar
12-16-2006, 04:04 PM
I don't know the original song, but I like this one here!

verse 1

damn...13 years old and she'll fuck a 17 years old...bad influences.

verse 2

that's tough man...11 years old and selling drugs

verse 3

ohhh, poor little girl! She know her father but this asshole beats her mom...

...

It's scary to reconized that in all stories the parents are main reasons why the kids have to live in such a shit way. They've got no person to talk to... And it's scary that these kids are really young!

Flash
12-16-2006, 04:21 PM
This is a great story!great story you realy now how to tell it right!

Verse 1!thats real shit!thats wat is going on!realy good verse!


Thinks She's Loved, Like She's Found What's Missing In Her Life ..
Finds Out Her Brother's In Debt, Grown Men Run Up In Her House ..
Her Brother Is Dead, She Knows This Ain't What Life's About ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
She Says She's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

Verse 2 Again what cruel life!this verse also was a good one!


Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Bang Red Or Blue Now It's Time To Make His Choice ..
Doesn't Wanna Do It But He's Scared To Raise His Voice ..
Pops Walked Out When He Was 5 And His Momma Still Grieving ..
So Now He's Gotta Bang And Start To Sell Dope Just To Feed Them ..

Verse 3 this was my favourite one!realy sry for that girl!


Wakes Up In The Morning Just To See Her Momma Crying ..
There's Nothing She Can Do To Help Her But She's Trying ..
No Food In The House So She Goes To School Hungry ..
Tears On Her Face Wondering "Does Anybody Love Me?" ..
Goes Home To Listen To Death Threats From A Neighbour ..
Moms Losing Her Mind, She Prays To God To Try Save Her ..

This was one hell of a good song!the hook was nice verse's were nice too!9.5/10!

Cap
12-16-2006, 07:00 PM
Now, Overall This Track Was SO Near Perfection, Heres Your Only Slip Up

Wonders Why Her Family's So Hated By The Hood ..
And Just Found Out Her "Daddy" Ain't Related By Blood ..

But I Still Enjoyed It - 9.8/10

POC Was Here
12-17-2006, 09:19 AM
Now, Overall This Track Was SO Near Perfection, Heres Your Only Slip Up

Wonders Why Her Family's So Hated By The Hood ..
And Just Found Out Her "Daddy" Ain't Related By Blood ..

But I Still Enjoyed It - 9.8/10

Damn You Fatboy

Uppin!!

Cap
12-17-2006, 10:36 AM
Damn You Fatboy

Uppin!!

The Fuck U Been? I Aint Got At U In Days Lol.

POC Was Here
12-17-2006, 11:26 AM
The Fuck U Been? I Aint Got At U In Days Lol.

Internet's Been Messed Up, Shit's Been Happening At Home And I've Been Drinking...... All Very Time Consuming.

POC Was Here
12-17-2006, 05:42 PM
Upppppiiiiiiin!!!

POC Was Here
12-17-2006, 08:18 PM
Bizzump.....

POC Was Here
12-18-2006, 12:10 PM
You're All Homosexuals

lilsam
12-18-2006, 01:28 PM
will feed soon bro

POC Was Here
12-18-2006, 02:29 PM
Good Looks Sam

Eyebagz
12-18-2006, 02:49 PM
its good real nice story telling man and great imaginery in places only downer some rhymes seem forced to me apart from that keep up man

lilsam
12-18-2006, 03:43 PM
Sick, I Really Feel How All The Rhymes Link Up 2 Them Leaving Home, All Having Different Problems But All Linked With Depressive Thoughts And Need Of Support. Very Real And For Some Associable, I Think This Is Awesome Fo A Free, I Say This Is Overall 'Hot'

Summer_heat
12-18-2006, 04:52 PM
You're All Homosexuals

:glare:


anyways, IF I HAD BEEN ON EARLIER! lol, i love it.
heard the original n im lovin it, cept i think insteada jus tellin the kiddies to "runaway" they cud have given better advice, now u gone get crazy lil girlies doin runners from they homes cos they got grounded r sumet... theres always some dumbasses that dont get traks tho aint there!

anyways, good job u kept the subjects similar, cos i agree, u cudnt really have done it on other topics, n even tho they were similar situations, u got diff stories to em, which was great, cos it flowed well too. great description n story tellin abilty POC.

very good for 15 mins!

Sparx
12-18-2006, 10:17 PM
Now Little Stacy Is Only 13 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Wonders Why Her Family's So Hated By The Hood ..
And Just Found Out Her "Daddy" Ain't Related By Blood ..
Her Birth Father Was A Snitch, A Family With A Bad Name ..
The House Gets Shot Up, On The Porch Stacy Cuts A Sad Frame ..
Her Momma Can't Cope, The Heroin Destroyed All Her Hope ..
Her Brother's Only 10, He's In The Trap Slinging Dope ..
Feeling Lonely, She's Hopeless Just Looking For Love ..
He's Near 17, She Thinks It's Cool To Fuck With A Thug ..
Starts To Hang Around Gangs, Won't Accept She's Risking Her Life ..
Thinks She's Loved, Like She's Found What's Missing In Her Life ..
Finds Out Her Brother's In Debt, Grown Men Run Up In Her House ..
Her Brother Is Dead, She Knows This Ain't What Life's About ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
She Says She's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

Deep shit dude, simple rhyme scheme but hella effective, good imagery and flooowww

[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love [x8]


Little Derek Is Only 11 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Bang Red Or Blue Now It's Time To Make His Choice ..
Doesn't Wanna Do It But He's Scared To Raise His Voice ..
Pops Walked Out When He Was 5 And His Momma Still Grieving ..
So Now He's Gotta Bang And Start To Sell Dope Just To Feed Them ..
Posted Up On The Block When He Shoulda Been At School ..
Yeah It's A Cruel World But There's Nothing He Can Do ..
A Victim Of Circumstance, Wishes He'd Been Given A Chance ..
Wants To Stop What He's Doing But He Knows That He Can't ..
There's Only 1 Dude He Trusts, And That's Himself ..
He Feels So Lonely, Nobody He Can Talk To For Help ..
Comes Home 1 Night, Finds Momma In Tears Yet Again ..
Can't Take It Anymore, He Made His Choice There And Then ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
He Says He's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..

same as above, i like the consistancy between the verses

[Hook - Mary J. Blige]
Runaway love [x8]

Little Sarah Is Only 8 Years Old ..
Tryna Figure Out Why The World Is So Cold ..
Wakes Up In The Morning Just To See Her Momma Crying ..
There's Nothing She Can Do To Help Her But She's Trying ..
No Food In The House So She Goes To School Hungry ..
Tears On Her Face Wondering "Does Anybody Love Me?" ..
Goes Home To Listen To Death Threats From A Neighbour ..
Moms Losing Her Mind, She Prays To God To Try Save Her ..
Pops Is Working Long Shifts To Support A Family Of 6 ..
A Drink Problem, So He Comes Home To Drink Till He's Sick ..
Sarah's Always In Trouble, All She Really Wants Is A Cuddle ..
She's In Her Own World, One You Can't See With The Hubble ..
Sees Daddy Hit Mom She Thinks "That Bastard Should Be In Prison" ..
Wonders Why God Never Ever Listened, Right Then She Made A Decision ..
Nothing Else To Do But Get Some Clothes And Pack ..
She Says She's Bout To Run Away And Never Come Back ..



overall this was a solid track, fuck multiz and punches, u got ur point across and thats what matters, really nice POC esp. since u did it in 15 minutes.

i would probly rate this a 9 if it was more complex, u definetly get a 10 for story telling and imagery, but overall i give it an 8.5/10

nice drop!

POC Was Here
12-20-2006, 11:12 AM
:glare:


anyways, IF I HAD BEEN ON EARLIER! lol, i love it.
heard the original n im lovin it, cept i think insteada jus tellin the kiddies to "runaway" they cud have given better advice, now u gone get crazy lil girlies doin runners from they homes cos they got grounded r sumet... theres always some dumbasses that dont get traks tho aint there!

anyways, good job u kept the subjects similar, cos i agree, u cudnt really have done it on other topics, n even tho they were similar situations, u got diff stories to em, which was great, cos it flowed well too. great description n story tellin abilty POC.

very good for 15 mins!

Thank You Sayiid!!

POC Was Here
12-20-2006, 11:12 AM
Thanks Sambo, Bagz And Sparx!

Summer_heat
12-20-2006, 11:19 AM
:(

stop with that now, it reminds me of lost, which reminds me its gone till feb which reminds me of Sawyer, which reminds me of last episode!

POC Was Here
12-20-2006, 11:25 AM
:(

stop with that now, it reminds me of lost, which reminds me its gone till feb which reminds me of Sawyer, which reminds me of last episode!

The Last Episode Was Delightful....... GO ON JACK!!!

LIL-LATINO MC
12-20-2006, 03:28 PM
this an good rap

Summer_heat
12-20-2006, 04:51 PM
yeah for once Jack werent so stuck up his own ass to think about anyone else. altho when they all get back to normal, i hope he aint "leader" no more, cos thats how he acts, n now ppl on island r like "whys loc givin us options? Jack wudnt have said shit all!" well exactly, jus cos dude a doc doesnt mean he better than ery one else!

anyways, me n u both r goin off topic now, i think its a plan by u to keep ur shit upped! lol jokin!

yung Kanon
12-22-2006, 12:24 PM
Lost is immense lol