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yung Kanon
12-12-2006, 03:40 PM
Jessica Begins To Wake, Eyes Slowly Open To Black,
As Static Begins To Creep From An Old TV In The Back.
Feet Above Fresh Blood, Warm Corpses And All,
As She Feels Metal Holding Her Head, Forced To A Wall
Her Eyes Only See Black, And Maybe A Panel At Most,
A Voice Slowly Raises As The TV Channels Its Host.

“You Live To Die, While Others Would Die To Live Another Week,
So Listen Up Bitch To The Lesson I Am About To Teach…
Those Who Don’t Appreciate Life…Will Never Deserve It,
So Listen To Your Mothers Last Screams As You Will Observe It…”

The Panel On The Wall Opens, Her Eyes Roll Down From Pain,
Only To Reveal Jessica’s Mother In A White Room, Bound By Chains.

“You’re Mother Is All You Have, When You Come Back To Home,
But Why Should I Care For Her Life, If You Don’t Even Appreciate Your Own.
Now Here’s Where The Fun Starts, Underneath One Of Your Teeth,
Holds The Power To Save Your Mother, With One Very Small Key.
You See That Water Rising? Well In 10 Minutes Or So,
You Will Witness Your Mother Face, As Her Lungs Will Explode.
In Your Left Hand Are Pliers, And On The Wall Is A Lock,
So Once You Find The Key, All The Water Will Stop.
So Take The Pain And Save Your Mother A Death From Water,
Or Watch As Your Mom As Goes On To Join Your Father…
To Save Her, All You Need Is The Strength From Within,
…Jessica Ten Minutes Till Fate…Let The Games Begin….”

Jessica Begins Sobbing, Visioning Her Mother’s Face,
But Jessica’s Feared The Sight Of Blood, Ever Since She Was Eight.
Duck Tape Covered The Mothers Mouth, With Water Violently Flowing,
Sweat Covered The Forehead, As No Eye Lids Were Showing.
Jessica Screams At The Sight, Takes The Pliers In Her Right,
Holds Them Up To Her Teeth, Hands Trembling In Fright.
Physically Weak, But Powered By Fear From Her Heart,
Statistically She Had 1 In 28 Chances Before The Start.
The Pliers Held A Front Tooth Tight, As Jessica Let Out A Scream,
The Roots Of The Tooth Twist, Producing A Dark Blood Stream.
Nauseated By The Taste, She Then Vomits On The Wall,
Spitting Out Blood And Bile, Chunks Of Flesh And All.
Fingering The Loose Skin In Her Mouth, Barely Can Speak,
As She Looks Up To Her Mother, Water Reaching Her Feet.
She Cant Find The Key So She Gives The Pliers A Lift,
Each Time She Breathes, Waves Of Blood Slide Over Her Lips.
Quickly Jerks Another Tooth, Once Again The Flesh Taste,
No Key As She Watches The Liquid Swallow Her Mothers Waist.




“Having Fun Jessica? Well Relax, Take A Breath
There’s Only Five More Minutes Until Your Mother Meets Her Death
Be Careful In The Choice Of Teeth You Are Picking,
Karma’s A Motherfucker, 5 Minutes And Ticking…”
.
Jessica Screams As She Pulls Tooth After Tooth,
Realizing She Should Have Appreciated Her Youth.
Her Cries Do Nothing, As She Holds The Tool For Its Purpose,
Rips Out A Molar, As A Jagged Metal Begins To Surface.
She Pulls Out The Copper Attached To Some Veins,
As She Clips The Strands Of Tendons As She Screams In Pain.
Her Mothers Neck Stretched, Gasping For Hair,
Sitting Up Straight As She Can, Clasping The Chair.
Jessica Fumbles The Key As She Catches It Fast,
Her Mother Now Breathing Water, Time Almost Past.
Jessica Screams As She Slams The Key In The Lock,
Suddenly The Water In The Room, Slowly Comes To A Stop.
Jessica Shouts For Victory, As She Watches The Water Drain,
Smiling At Her Mother, With A Mouth Full Of Pain.

“Congratulations, You Saved You’re Mother From Watery Grave,
But Realistically, All It Was…Was Your Life That You Gave.”

As The Water Is Depleting Ahead, Jessica Hears A Loud Sound,
As She See’s A Drain Rushing Water Towards Her, Below On The Ground.
As Her Mothers Room Drains, Jessica’s Now Floods,
The Floor Now A Mixture Of Teeth, Water, And Blood.
Her Mother Screams, As The Chair Holds Her Weight,
Watching Her Only Child Taking On Her Mothers Fate.
Screams Of Women Echo Within Both Rooms,
One Is Now A Waiting Area, Another Turned Tomb.
Jessica Screams For Her Mother, But Help Is Impossible,
Because Once Attempt To End You’re Life, Fate Is Unstoppable…

“You Received What You Wanted Jessica, Hope You Had Fun,
The Time Is Now Up As The Game Is Now Done.”

Jessica Now Breathing Liquid Stares At The One She Hated The Worst,
The Mother Watches Jessica’s Face As Her Finally Her Lungs Burst

yung Kanon
12-13-2006, 01:16 PM
Thoughts anyone lol ????????????????????

Flash
12-13-2006, 05:19 PM
Damn you maniiac you're the next Jigsaw killer!lol!This is why you never should get inside of the movie SAW!look at kanon he already thought a New Game lol just kidding!this was great it will be a perfect part in SaW 4 gess youre going to be the director!lol!

yung Kanon
12-14-2006, 02:34 PM
thanks flash lol as a job i actually want to direct music videos lol props any more thoughts?

Summer_heat
12-18-2006, 06:45 PM
yes, i have no fuckin idea how this has got slept on.
this is my new favourite thing by u YK no doubt.
im jus not able to believe its ur own work, n i know that sounds a bitch,
but if so u have outdone ur self!

the key in the teeth bit is jus unexpected, musta been a small key! but the way u did describe it was jus gorey n brill.
u have good story writing ability. maybe u shud give that a go, u know u can always do it on the side. even writing short stories, u cud do that in ur 6 week hols even.
anyways, ima bump this back to top, cos u need that feed u deserve fo this fantastic peice!

yung Kanon
12-19-2006, 04:36 PM
LMAO this is my work fo sho i dont know how its your favorite piece of mine because its not rap really this is my GCSE coursework not a quick thing ive keyed up fo a internet track lol so its bound to be of a different quality i got A* wit this which is like da only A* ill ever get lol thanks fo the bump summer

lilsam
12-19-2006, 04:37 PM
It Should Be Good
Nials A Convicted Killa
EXPERIENCE

Summer_heat
12-19-2006, 06:48 PM
hmm... interestin thing is u say, how can it be my favourite peice, when its not rap? what is rap? Rhythm And Poetry =P

so yeah it is one of my better things from u. u lucky git, u get to write poetry for ur coursework at GCSE!! i wish we cudda done sumet like that insteada the borin shits we did. not suprised u got an A* fo it, well done. i dint get an A* for any of my c/wks all Cs, altho thats cos my teachas was racist, i got A in end so i musta done real well in tests.

lilsam
12-21-2006, 06:44 PM
You Know Its Something Pretty Special When Somebody Like Nial Gets An A* Lol No In All Seriousness This Verse Was Hot, He Sent It Me On Msn And I Was Greatly Impressed. Very Gory And Crazily Psychopatic, It Was A Thrill Ride From Start 2 Finish, Like Saw 2 In A Poem.

lilsam
12-21-2006, 06:48 PM
nial you allowed 2 swear in coursework?

Trubs
12-21-2006, 07:34 PM
“You Live To Die, While Others Would Die To Live Another Week,
So Listen Up Bitch To The Lesson I Am About To Teach…
Those Who Don’t Appreciate Life…Will Never Deserve It,
So Listen To Your Mothers Last Screams As You Will Observe It…”

^^^^
this part stood out, it caught my attention if u will...

damn..best piece ive seen in this section since forever, structure was on point, imagery was good...it really reminds me of some enzyme shit but ya'll probably dont know about him...anyhow NIIIIIIIIIIIIIICE! i rate it 10/10 and i rarely do that so job well done kanon...peace~

yung Kanon
12-23-2006, 09:26 AM
i added the swearing sam lol

Redd
01-15-2007, 04:44 AM
holy mother fucker. hahaha your fucking sick! very creative though. the style (and subject matter i guess) is a little bit like eminems. really descriptive. but i didnt think anyone else would be able to pull something like that off. haha its also similar to eminem because you clearly hate women. haha jks

Flash
01-15-2007, 08:25 AM
holy mother fucker. hahaha your fucking sick! very creative though. the style (and subject matter i guess) is a little bit like eminems. really descriptive. but i didnt think anyone else would be able to pull something like that off. haha its also similar to eminem because you clearly hate women. haha jks

sry to disapoint you but this was bited!

Nickolai
01-15-2007, 03:39 PM
how do u kno?
it hasnt been proven
oly 1 track has been

Flash
01-15-2007, 03:42 PM
come on Nick!You know it yourself where is he now!let him prove that he hasnt bited!He escaped just like Duke!

Nickolai
01-16-2007, 01:54 PM
Innocent Until Proven Guilty... On This Piece Of Work Anywayz

lilsam
01-16-2007, 02:04 PM
he didnt bite this i doubt
its coursework