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ALEXE
12-10-2006, 12:42 PM
A month of equable quiescence,
It's hazardous to think of rain.
Catch a smile in every instance,
Break a hole through every hindrance,
Grab a hold to the last riddance
Of past worlds hurting amain.

A week of happiness, content,
Meek surprise on such fulfillment
Seeming of heavenly intent
And free of need to hate, resent,
Thinking this has certain extent
But mistaking, love is arrant.

A day of glee, serenity,
It's ludicrous to try to frown,
Exceeding to epiphany,
Too high on life for nepenthe,
Ecstatic, bit perilously
But 'tis implacable, top-down.

An hour of extreme climax
Only moans and shouts expressing.
No chance to grasp strengths to relax,
No breath, implosion of thorax,
Chests drum roll, close to heart attacks,
Vocal cords and muscles tensing.

A minute of tensed vibration
Trembling each bone of the body.
Shaking rhythm in regression,
Hectic blood-pumps in distension.
Slow regaining clear perception
And a grip of things around me.

A second of sob infancy:
Muscles succumb, breath stalls in place.
Figure expression's apathy,
Torpid mug-shots, null sympathy,
All drained of zest and energy,
I hide my face, sweet-sour grace…

BlackStar
12-10-2006, 12:52 PM
reconized it...will feed later! you know, it takes a lot of time :D

yung Kanon
12-10-2006, 12:57 PM
same ill feed later nice to see you back ALEXE

Flash
12-10-2006, 01:11 PM
This is what i wanted to tell wit my song suicide!wery goot i realy felt this one!nice come back!

yung Kanon
12-10-2006, 04:30 PM
A month of equable quiescence,
It's hazardous to think of rain.
Catch a smile in every instance,
Break a hole through every hindrance,
Grab a hold to the last riddance
Of past worlds hurting amain.

A week of happiness, content,
Meek surprise on such fulfillment
Seeming of heavenly intent
And free of need to hate, resent,
Thinking this has certain extent
But mistaking, love is arrant.

A day of glee, serenity,
It's ludicrous to try to frown,
Exceeding to epiphany,
Too high on life for nepenthe,
Ecstatic, bit perilously
But 'tis implacable, top-down.

An hour of extreme climax
Only moans and shouts expressing.
No chance to grasp strengths to relax,
No breath, implosion of thorax,
Chests drum roll, close to heart attacks,
Vocal cords and muscles tensing.

A minute of tensed vibration
Trembling each bone of the body.
Shaking rhythm in regression,
Hectic blood-pumps in distension.
Slow regaining clear perception
And a grip of things around me.

A second of sob infancy:
Muscles succumb, breath stalls in place.
Figure expression's apathy,
Torpid mug-shots, null sympathy,
All drained of zest and energy,
I hide my face, sweet-sour grace…



Touching man your use of words is amazing you structure your poems very well really good shit great vocab your very descriptive wit da verse about sex the second verse was properbly my favorite stay alexe your Dope!!!

Summer_heat
12-10-2006, 07:49 PM
very nice.
good description in there, but i was unable to follow on at points.
well i got that it was about sex, but the build up stanzas (1-3) were very vague.
which also give it a nice effect in a way too, so yeah good job on that.

dint get the ending properly, why "hide your face"?

anyways love readin ur ish, keep at it!

Chopz
12-11-2006, 09:11 AM
Amazing.. In my eyes one of the best poems I have read in a long time.. I feel that every Stanza had something special about it, every line had a certain presence which made it feel special. My favourite part was the second. The whole poem was very descriptive and you got across what you were trying to say ver well in my vision. You used nice vocab and in my opinion not too much. amazing poem Alexe.

BlackStar
12-13-2006, 11:56 AM
wow...that was really good! I like how you describe your feelings and what happens with your body. You point a very good picture in my head.

Great poem!

Flash
12-13-2006, 11:57 AM
but where are you alexe on msn everywhere???where are you

ALEXE
12-25-2015, 02:43 PM
but where are you alexe on msn everywhere???where are you
*9 years later*
I'm right here, homie! :laugh: :rock: :drunk:

David Daniel Davis
02-06-2016, 01:48 AM
Damn, were you locked up?

ALEXE
02-06-2016, 03:29 AM
Haha no ... I just got involved with video games modding communities :)
I currently run one called gunetwork . org
But I still remember my roots, kna'm'sayin? :D